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Depression is a disease.



It is a monster that lies within the depths of our mind and it eats away at our happiness and dreams.

It is the ones that have the nerve to tell us to get over it that will never understand our pain as we sit with our loved ones and still feel empty and alone!



And as we sit alone, we hear the thoughts echo through the dark hallways in our mind that we are not good enough. We are worthless.



Depression is a darkness from which we cannot outrun as it nips at our heels and eventually catches up to us and we are consumed.



It is something only we and the ones who endure it can understand, or even begin to describe. There are days where the darkness is so heavy and painful that we do not have the energy to stand.



We are not weak though, even though that is how many of us feel! To survive each day with this burden on our shoulders makes us stronger than anyone alive!

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RogueMudblood Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2015   Writer
You've certainly tackled a difficult subject, but one that is definitely worth some discussion.

Given the section you've put this in, I'm assuming that you meant this to me of a poem than prose. Right now, it reads more like emotional non-fiction prose than poetry. If you want to make it a poetry piece, I'm going to suggest some line breaks within your sentence structure. For example,
It is a monster that lies within the depths of our mind and it eats away at our happiness and dreams.

could be broken apart as
It is a monster
that lies within the depths
of our mind
and it eats away
at our happiness
and dreams.


Formatting it that way gives the reader more time to pause at the moments you want them to notice, such as putting emphasis on the fact that it's a monster, and that it eats away at you inside.

There are also a few places that you might want to make some small edits.
darkness from which we cannot outrun - I would suggest eliminating "from" as it makes the phrase awkward. The sentence this phrase is in is also a run on. In order to offset that, because artistically it can certainly work for you, I would add a dash between "us" and "and".

I like the words you've used to discuss the issue, and I do think that you've managed to bring up a perspective that is far too often ignored. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
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ElectricPoodle Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very true.
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kiramaru7 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2014
That is sooo true. :hug:
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